Bitte um Korrektur.

einafets · 7. November 2006

Könntet ihr auch mal hier nach Fehlern schauen?
hallo! um meinen ausdruck zu verbessern schreib ich oft texte. es wäre toll von euch wenn ihr ihn mal auf fehler untersuchen würdet. (MÖCHTE MICH JA VERBESSERN) Rechtschreibfehler sind bei mir oft Tippfehler, die sind ok. sorry wenn der text vielleicht zu lang ist. VIELEN DANK!

Drugs had a big influence of the music in the 60s and of course of the Hippies. The music in 1965 was charcterized with unusual sounds. The drugs were a kind of protest against the conservative and stiffly society. They wanted to change their sensory perception; they wanted to create their own personality and they wanted to improve their sexuel relationships. Drugs were very important of the hippies and they took a part of their normal life. But many of them ignored the side effects and died. Janis Joplin, for example, who took a lot of drugs and alcohol during her performances on stage, had many feelings of weaknesses and died some days later.
But drugs are not the only bad side of Hippies. I sayed that Hippies lived in cummunes and they had no atteched partner. The probability to get aids was very high, because they ofen had sex without condoms. And so many Hippies died or infected by the virus.

In 1967 the Hippie movement was on their highest point. The term “summer of love” tried to describe the awareness of life, which was in San Francisco. An example is the song “San Fransicso”, which was sung by Scott McKenzie. Thousend of people streamed from the USA to the disrict Haight-Astsbury in San Francisco, because they wanted to be a part of the Hippie movement. The town was very popular with the Hippies, because of their very multicultural atmospere and the town became an emblem of the Hippies.

The original Hippies beared in 1967 their culture to gave, because they don’t wanted a mass culture . But today we often see some human beeings on the streets who looks like a Hippie and some big festivals exists in our time, like the ‘Burg Harzberg Festival’. This festival in the biggest in Europe. And so we can see that some people tries to live like a Hippie, to do crazy things but it isn’t easy .

richard · 8. November 2006

Drugs had a big influence on the music in the 60s and of course on the Hippies. The music in 1965 was charcterized by unusual sounds. The drugs were a kind of protest against the conservative and stiffl society. They wanted to change their sensory perception; they wanted to create their own personality and they wanted to improve their sexual relationships. Drugs were very important for the hippies and they formed a part of their normal life. But many of them ignored the side effects and died. Janis Joplin, for example, who took a lot of drugs and alcohol during her performances on stage, had many feelings of weaknesses and died some days later.
But drugs are not the only bad side of the Hippies. I said that Hippies lived in communes and they had no steady partner. The probability to get aids was very high, because they ofen had sex without condoms. And so many Hippies died or were infected with the virus.

In 1967 the Hippie movement was at its peak. The term “summer of love” tried to describe the awareness of life, which was in San Francisco. An example is the song “San Fransicso”, which was sung by Scott McKenzie. Thousands of people streamed from the USA to the disrict Haight-Astsbury in San Francisco, because they wanted to be a part of the Hippie movement. The town was very popular with the Hippies, because of its very multicultural atmospere and the town became an emblem of the Hippies.

The original Hippies buried in 1967 their culture because they did not wante a mass culture . But today we often see some human beings on the streets who look like hippies and some big festivals exists in our time, like the ‘Burg Harzberg Festival’. This festival is the biggest in Europe. And so we can see that some people try to live like a Hippie, to do crazy things but it isn’t easy .

Ich habe den Text korrigiert, aber die Fehler sind nicht markiert. Das geht schneller!

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