Fehlersuche2! Wirklich wichtig!DAnke

    Excapt the diffeent sozial status, both families are comepletely different. Oliver and his father don`t have a real relationship. Both behave each other like two acquaintance not like son and father. That way that Olivers father is very busy. He doesn`t have time for the thoughts and feelings for his son. And maybe in the childhood was that not different. He doesn`t ask how Oliver feel and whats new in his live. There are no warm greetings. All is cold and not family. But Oliver doesn`t try it, because he knows that his father don’t like that and he knows not differently. The relationship is simple cold and has nothing to do with a father-son-relationship. The relationship of Jenny an her fahter is completely different. She doesn’t greet his father with “sir”. Jenny says “dad” or his name. Both of them lost a very important person and that bring each other more together. Besides they call each other and they speak about the day and any things. For him is his daughter the most important person in his life and he would all do for her. That’s a real relationship.

    Ich versuch' nicht so viel zu ändern bei meiner Korrektur.


    Here goes..


    Except the different social status, both families are completely different.


    Oliver and his father don`t have a real relationship.


    Both behave more like just two acquaintances than like son and father. That's why Olivers father is very busy. ( There is a gap between these two sentences. His father couldn't be very busy, just cos they are like buddies! )


    He doesn`t have much time to pay attention to the thoughts and feelings of his son.


    And maybe in the childhood was that not different. ( I don't get this one. Sorry. :( ) D'you wanna say: He was treated the same in his childhood, too? )



    He doesn`t ask how Oliver feels and what's new in his live. There are no warm greetings at all.
    Everything is cold and there is no family atmosphere.


    But Oliver doesn`t try it, because he knows that his father don’t like that and he knows not differently. (What not try? What doesn't his father like? What d'you mean by"he knows not differently"? )


    The relationship is simply cold and has nothing to do with a father-son-relationship.



    Hope you don't mind my changing your sentences a bit. I am running out of time now.


    See ya later,
    H