Suche jemanden der meinen text korrigiert

    Ich sollte ein [SIZE=3]ende für eine kurzgeschichte schreiben....und habe da bestimmt ganz viele fehler drin, bin nämlich nicht so sprach begabt. Wäre super lieb, wenn jemand diesen text korrigieren würde im Hinblick auf Ausdruck, Satzbau und Grammatik.
    Vielen Dank!!
    Hallo, Verbesserungen in Grün im Forum. Einige Kleinigkeiten habe ich ohne Farbmarkierung verbessert.
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    But she was wrong. Suddenly the man looked up straight into her eyes. She felt that her heart did notstop beating quickly. She thought to ask him for the price of the tickets to drive to Hollywood but she couldn’t say any word. At that moment her rescue came because a bus arrived at the bus station so that the man turned his look away from her. She felt ashamed and that’s why she began to run the street down away from the bus station and the man. She didn’t run a long way because she stumbled over a stone fell down. There lay the ticket. She took it. It was a ticket to go to Hollywood. That ticket was already cashed but in one of the edges of the ticket was the price for the fare to Hollywood. She felt happy that she now knew how much it costs to go to Hollywood but suddenly he stood in front of her smiling. The young Ford salesman asked her if she had come to a decision if she would accept his proposal of marriage. She didn’t know what she should answer because she had not come to a decision yet. But then she saw a woman with two little children who were carrying(?) very tiny lots of bags and a baby carriage. Since that moment she knew that this was not the way to live. She refused the Ford salesman’s proposal of marriage. She enclosed the ticket with her hand firmly and turned on her heels to go home and pack her bags to go to Hollywood. He said goodbye to her with the words that he would wait for her. [/SIZE] [/SIZE] [/SIZE]