Fehlerkontrolle engl. Text

    Hallo,
    ich bereite mich gerade auf eine Englischarbeit für nächste Woche vor. Es könnte unter anderem drankommen:
    Die Vor- und Nachteile des Internets.
    Da neben Grammatik und natürlich der Stoff aus der Unit drankommen, ist der Text auch nicht sehr lang und sollte reichen.
    Bitte mal nachsehen vor allem nach Grammatikfehler und vllt nach dem Inhalt:


    The Internet has changed the world decisively within the last few years.
    The flow of information and the information obtaining have got much faster through this.
    One must look no longer for his desired information in books and saves himself the purchase of these books.
    With a couple of mouse clicks the sought-after is found fast.
    The time-saver has just got very big for pupils through this.
    Moreover many new professions and also many new jobs have arisen by the Internet.
    However there are also many disadvantages.
    Many people get into the isolation because although they communicate with other people by computers but they lost the social contacts.
    Through this the danger of the Internet addiction increases.
    Furthermore the distribution of criminal contents as well as the deceit has increased enormously since there are too few control possibilities.
    Since everyone cannot afford the internet access the danger of the splitting insists into online and offline.
    Result: Result:
    The advantages are often the disadvantages, too.


    Vielen Dank Gruß Ricarda ?(

    The Internet has changed the world decisively within the last few years.
    The flow of information and the information obtaining have got much faster through this.
    One must look no longer for the desired information in books and saves oneself self the purchase of these books.
    With a couple of mouse clicks the sought-after is found fast.
    So a lot of time can be saved..
    Moreover many new professions and also many new jobs have been created by the Internet.
    However there are also many disadvantages.
    Many people become isolated because although they communicate with other people by computers but they lost the social contacts.
    Through this the danger of the Internet addiction increases.
    Furthermore the distribution of criminal contents as well as the deceit have increased enormously since there are too few control possibilities.
    Since everyone cannot afford the internet access the danger of the splitting into online and offline users is possible .
    Result: Result:
    The advantages are often the disadvantages, too.